The fact that I can actually see this happening as I read it is just... amazing. It's not a happy poem, but it's certainly a fantastic one in that it hits me right in the feels, haha. My congrats and compliments to you!
I find fascinating that a piece of writing can have such a great effect on people and appeal to them merely by virtue of their capability of relating to its words; how that alone can be such a great source of beauty that they feel the need to share it with other people. And while I do can somehow relate to the words in this poem I honestly fail to see any beauty in the literary composition, itself. Please don't take offense in this, as I'm hardly a writer or even a critic. I find some of your pieces interesting and I'm in no way questioning your abilities as a writer, I just wanted to share a simple observation that called my attention. Congrats on the DD
Thanks! I know what you mean about the composition and honestly I feel like this isn't really the best piece to highlight from my gallery - but I am extremely grateful nonetheless! I remember when I wrote this, I think it took me less than a minute, it was just a personal reflection on something that I have been through, and so there is nothing really structured about it at all and I almost deleted it too! hehe.
Thanks for understanding! Yeah, I've felt the same way about some of my creations and it's funny sometimes the simplest one or the one you do that really boring and uneventful Sunday afternoon when you're not really trying is the one that gets the most attention
Wonderfully written, hon. I can certainly relate to the subject at hand, which always makes a poem more beautiful when it can be felt by not only the author. Everything works together so well together, and the abrupt ending is very suiting for the situation.